So how do you change a story in a newspaper for using when public speaking. If you remember the formal writing from my last post, compare it to this weeks post to see the difference.
The ladies name, Maxine, is mentioned close to the start, rather than labelling her the “object of his affections,” and that is trite.
Meaning of the phrase, “attracted but adamant,” in news reports probably are not clear for- some listeners. Even though adamant is not an odd word it may sound somewhat similar to a new kind of washing machine. Plus it doesn’t create a definite picture in listeners’ minds.
And so after the strategy of making word pictures, the public speaker said nothing at all about “attracted but adamant.” Instead he pictured lovelight in Maxine’s eyes, and pride on her tongue.
After that for interest, to get away from so many statements, he chucked in a brief, simple question, “Just what did Fats do?”
Scattering speeches with questions and exclamations affords variety and relaxes listeners’ minds. Short sentences, also, are easily understood by listeners’ brains. However utilizing a lot of lengthy sentences causes a speech to drag or ramble.
But getting back to the story – rather than allowing Fats keep on being a hero, the public speaker finishes with a bit of humor. He has the person return to his old practice of eating pork.
When listeners hear this they smile and say to themselves, “Just like an old, married man!”
Like an arranger improvises or adds “extra touches” to a musical composition, public speakers may take reasonable liberties with an illustration.
A speaker should never go away from the basic truth in a story, but he can include colorful phrases to produce scenes clearer. Magnolias and moonlight, for instance, add color to a Dixie suggestion.
Personas ought to be considered in a normal manner. Fat Samples would speak, in a gentle, good-natured drawl, “Max, Honey, will yuh all marry me?” Certainly he would not talk in the manner of a Philly lawyer who may say, “Mr. Marvin F. Samples proposed marriage to his fiance, Miss Maxine Whippledager, III, while conversing with the party of the second part in a vehicle commonly called an automobile.”
In other places another sweetheart might say, fast as the ticking of a wrist watch, “How’s about it, Kid? Let’s you’n me git spliced!”
An appealing speaker studies the personalities in his stories. He imagines them speaking in a natural, realistic manner. He isn’t like a producer of an amateur production who insisted that a junkyard trader (in the play) speak with excellent enunciation like a, typical university president. Studying people, and showing them true to life will make stories “naturally” intriguing. Why don’t you play along with nature and present people as they actually are rather than in an artificial, stilted style or perhaps the way we think they should be!
In my next post I’ll give you another tip on using stories in public speaking. Stories are a very important part of persuading and informing people when speaking to groups of any size. Our free e-course will help you speak with confidence and receive the benefits that go to confident speakers. You ca get the e-course by putting your details over to the right.